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Posted: May 16th, 2021, 5:11 pm
I found some copy and I rewrote it with some imagination to make it better. Any feedback would be highly appreciated. Thank you.
Original copy
[Headline] How To Create Quotations and Proposals
That Win the Work
On average, 90% of the design work you’ll go after will require a detailed quotation or proposal. Even from current clients.
That’s why it’s so important to create a proposal that is as persuasive as possible. Just by improving a few key elements in your template, you can increase your chances of success by 20% or more. Do the math. That’s one more job you win out of every six you bid on!
In my upcoming teleclass, I’ll outline for you the latest best practices in creating and winning proposals. Mark your calendars. It’s on Thursday, October 21st.
My Revised Copy
[Headline] Remove the guesswork and ease stress when creating quotations and proposals that win more projects for your freelance business
According to the Freelance Institute of America (FIA), clients –both current and prospects– differentiate between average and excellent freelancers based on the kind of proposals and quotations they send.
This is why your proposals have to be extremely persuasive. By removing a few elements in your template, you increase your chances of success by 20% and you get a proven ready-to-go template for your next project. Proven templates also allow you to contact clients faster. Do the math, you increase your bidding net from 3 prospects with 0 wins to 6 prospects with 1 win. The cherry on top is that your template is easily customizable, which means fewer worries for you.
Visit my website freelanceteachings.com and join my e-mail newsletter to receive weekly updates on the latest and best practices high-earning freelancers use to create and win proposals. Join today to learn how to professionally communicate with clients and prospects.
Original copy
[Headline] How To Create Quotations and Proposals
That Win the Work
On average, 90% of the design work you’ll go after will require a detailed quotation or proposal. Even from current clients.
That’s why it’s so important to create a proposal that is as persuasive as possible. Just by improving a few key elements in your template, you can increase your chances of success by 20% or more. Do the math. That’s one more job you win out of every six you bid on!
In my upcoming teleclass, I’ll outline for you the latest best practices in creating and winning proposals. Mark your calendars. It’s on Thursday, October 21st.
My Revised Copy
[Headline] Remove the guesswork and ease stress when creating quotations and proposals that win more projects for your freelance business
According to the Freelance Institute of America (FIA), clients –both current and prospects– differentiate between average and excellent freelancers based on the kind of proposals and quotations they send.
This is why your proposals have to be extremely persuasive. By removing a few elements in your template, you increase your chances of success by 20% and you get a proven ready-to-go template for your next project. Proven templates also allow you to contact clients faster. Do the math, you increase your bidding net from 3 prospects with 0 wins to 6 prospects with 1 win. The cherry on top is that your template is easily customizable, which means fewer worries for you.
Visit my website freelanceteachings.com and join my e-mail newsletter to receive weekly updates on the latest and best practices high-earning freelancers use to create and win proposals. Join today to learn how to professionally communicate with clients and prospects.