Hi guys can someone help me to review this copy pls

[DLaw]

SL: 5 THINGS KILLING YOUR BUSINESS

Hey [Name],

Ever wondered why your business thrives today but struggles tomorrow?

Are you tired of constantly starting over because your business keeps crashing?

If that sounds familiar, this is for you.

Back in 2017, I decided to start my own business.
But by 2020, I was still stuck—struggling, broke, and completely lost.

I watched my business slowly crumble right before my eyes, and the worst part?
I didn’t know how to stop it.

I felt like a failure, especially as time kept slipping away.

But then, I made a decision. I picked myself up, did extensive research, and approached things differently.
And guess what?

Boom! My business took off.

Today, I own an 8-figure business that operates effortlessly—even without my constant involvement.

The same person who couldn’t scrape together a dollar in 2021 is now earning 8 figures!

How did I do it? By focusing on these five key things:

1. Set Clear Goals:
Without a clear vision, confusion takes over—for you, your team, and your customers.

2. Do Proper Market Research:
Validate your ideas, analyze your competitors, and understand your audience.

3. Master Marketing and Lead Generation:
Build a strong presence and reputation in the market.

4. Manage Your Time Wisely:
Learn to prioritize and focus on what truly matters.

5. Adaptability:
Stay flexible and pivot when necessary to stay ahead.

If you’re ready to learn how I turned my struggles into an 8-figure success,

I’m hosting a free event where I’ll reveal the proven strategies I used to build my business from scratch.

Spots are limited, so don’t wait!

Click the link below to secure your spot and start your journey to success.

I can’t wait to see you there!

[Name]

[SARubin]

Hi DLaw,
It looks pretty good.

One suggestion...
If you want more people to click on the link, I recommend NOT giving away the 5 steps in the email.

Instead of giving them the "secret", try leaving the mystery open so they need to take a small action (click on the link) if they want to know the secret.

Something like...

How did I do it? By focusing on five key things:
With these five keys almost any business can succeed (it's almost impossible to fail)
But without these keys it's almost impossible for a business to succeed!

If you’re ready to learn how I turned my struggles into an 8-figure success, and how you can do the same, click on the link...


You can edit that and pretty it up a bit, but this way you stir a little curiosity without giving the "secret" away in the email.

Something to think about...

All the best,
Steve

[DLaw]

Thanks a lot