Will I make a Good Copywriter?..🙇🏼🤷🏼‍♂️Please review my first copy, thanks

[navisnill]

SL:

- Baby eczema relief in 48 hours
- Is Eczema natural for babies 3 months and older?
- Who says 24 hours is too little to start seeing changes?
- Get rid of eczema in just 48 hours..
- Get rid of Eczema in 2 minutes!


Hey %firstname%

Fed up with eczema on your baby’s skin?

Tired of watching your baby cry from the itchy red and bumpy skin?

Then let’s get rid of that disturbing eczema once and for all!

We’re currently educating women (for absolutely free)

On how to get rid of their babies eczema.

75% of the women you ask will say it’s natural

And your baby will outgrow it over time

But, they are completely ignorant of the fact

That your baby stands a MAJOR risk

Of getting further infections

Which will lead to more skin problems

If the eczema is not properly treated.

Question is:

Is there a safe and reliable way to completely

Get rid of eczema?

Yes, there is!

And you can start now.

We’ve put together a 2 minutes video

Explaining the steps to follow

to completely get rid of eczema

In 48 hours!

Watch 2 mins video!



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[SARubin]

It looks pretty good.
You might want to use a slightly stronger call to action at the end.

Something like

Watch the 2 mins video right now and end your baby's eczema for good
or
Watch the 2 mins video right now and say goodbye to your baby's eczema once and for all

Or something along those lines to future pace the results in your readers life.

Just a suggestion...
All the best,
Steve

[navisnill]

Thank you very much for your review. I'll change the CTA as advised.